100 WC week 10

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                                                                       Treasure Island

I was on the beach when I saw a glass bottle with what appeared to be was a tiny island with   treasure inside. I opened the bottle and I was sucked into a whirlpool of space and time and fell "plop"! into the sand of a beautiful beach. And on that beach, there was a girl staring at me.  But then I heard a boom in the distance.  "Pirates"! , the girl cried "Hide the treasure!". I didn't know what she was talking about but I went anyway. I saw a cave with gold everywhere.
"But where will we hide it all"? I said. It was too late.

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  1. UnknownNovember 19, 2017 at 9:45 PM

    An interesting idea for a story but you have so many ideas crammed into 100 words. I wonder how you can pick out the most parts to tell your story. Many of your sentences begin with 1,2 or 3 letter words, I wonder how you can change some of the beginning words for sentence variety.

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